In writing room 11 have been writing about a video about a boy not liking a dog than he likes the dog.
Hope you like my writing I wrote.
One sunny day I was playing Call of Duty with my friend Shikya. Call of Duty was our favourite game to play. Mum came back from shopping. She opened the blinds and I got mad because it was too bright, but I ignored it. Mum came up to me and she gave me a box, mum said “ Here you go Kylie this is a present for you to open”. “Phone rings”. Mum said “let me get the phone”.
Shikya and I opened the present, and out popped a cute soft Puppy!!!. We were so surprised. I held her and I looked at her legs and she only had three legs!!. I got mad so I threw her on the ground. She kept coming to me and I kept getting mad. The puppy came to me and she gave me the red ball and I was thinking she wanted to play fetch. I felt bad so I decided to go outside with her and play fetch.
I stood up and I got my crutches because I can’t walk without them, and I think that's the reason why mum brought me the puppy . Me and my cute fluffy puppy went outside. I said to mum “Mum, me and my new puppy are going to play outside”. We were playing fetch and I thought “What should I name my new puppy? I think I should name her Kendall. Come Kendall lets go get you a treat”. Kendall and I went to go to the supermarket to buy her a treat because she is already being a good puppy. We got to the store and we went to the dog food aisle. Kendall smelt some of them. So we got this puppy treat and it had flavors like grape, blueberry,strawberry and raspberry in it. We went back home and I gave some treats to Kendall.
Kendall and Shikya and I continued to play Call of Duty. We made some snacks because we got hungry.
A nice piece of writing. Very well done. You have all the ideas in order and have made it interesting. Ka Pai! Just check spaces after you copy and paste as you need to take some out. Please add a photo.
ReplyDeleteWhat I really like about your writing Maryberth is that you gave lots of information.You gave the puppy a name.You also explained what you and the puppy did and with who.
ReplyDeleteDo you really think that the puppy will eat the flavoured treats yo brought?.
Our dog enjoys chicken flavoured treats.I think if I gave him one that smelt like fruit, he'd leave it alone.
Hello Maryberth.
ReplyDeleteI am just leaving a comment to let you know that I have had a look at your blog tonight.
Have a wonderful holiday.